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The Sea Bandit

20 Aug

Verse one

all my love

entrapped in glass

the blue sea bandits

stole it

the sea bandit

stole my heart

sealed in a bottle

I watch it part

Verse two

Verse three

Oh! sea bandit

I give you my heart

bear it gently

to my lover

shores apart

when you see him

tenderly implore

tell him

I can bear

the distance,  no more

Aubrie Cox is one of the bloggers, whose writing I admire greatly. She is hosting a sea and/ or thieves theme at yay words. Even though, I am not adept at any form of poetry, I couldn’t pass this one up after seeing the beautiful doodle she drew for it. Aubrie, here are my submissions, inspired by your doodle and theme. I am sorry, I can’t seem to stick to any fixed format while writing my verse. But what I lack in discipline, I try to make up in enthusiasm.  :)

14 Responses to “The Sea Bandit”

  1. redplace August 20, 2012 at 6:25 am:08 #

    This took my break away the moment I started reading. Beautiful writing!

  2. Shivya August 20, 2012 at 6:25 am:08 #

    Loved it, Sapna :) i think the best poetry is written free flow, and you just proved that!

    • justanotherwakeupcall August 20, 2012 at 6:25 am:08 #

      Thanks Shivya! Each time I read a post/ comment from you, I think about the ‘yet to be written’ ladakh trip! have I mentioned, I hate doing stuff that has to be done! will wait till no one expects it anymore :)

  3. Kathryn McCullough August 20, 2012 at 6:25 pm:08 #

    Lovely poem, my friend. I think you are a more adept writer than you realize. Your work is beautiful!
    Hugs,
    Kathy

    • justanotherwakeupcall August 20, 2012 at 6:25 pm:08 #

      Thank you kathy! You know how much your words mean to me. you just made my week :)

  4. sparklysilverstars August 20, 2012 at 6:25 pm:08 #

    Very beautiful poem…Straight from heart!

    • justanotherwakeupcall August 20, 2012 at 6:25 pm:08 #

      isn’t poetry always??? prose can be tailored and written from one’s mind but poetry just comes from the heart! Don’t you agree? Thanks for visiting :)

  5. Somesh Mahanty August 20, 2012 at 6:25 pm:08 #

    U keep doing better with each one :)

    • justanotherwakeupcall August 20, 2012 at 6:25 pm:08 #

      thank you Somesh! I hope that continues, cause there’s much scope for improvement. :)

  6. Yousei Hime August 30, 2012 at 6:25 pm:08 #

    So happy you’re participating. I haven’t had time or energy to jump into this one. I look forward to seeing the finished collection. :)

    • justanotherwakeupcall August 31, 2012 at 6:25 am:08 #

      I just scribbled what came to my mind on seeing that doodle. Don’t know if that can qualify as ‘participating’. Haven’t managed to look at the others! I too look forward to seeing the final collection. The theme is beautiful and the entries are bound to be evocative :)

  7. Aubrie Cox September 8, 2012 at 6:25 am:09 #

    Sapna,

    Finally, I’m starting to get to comment submissions and whatnot… And here you are. I love verse 3 and would love to include it in the final collection! Thanks for these wonderful poems… :)

    Aubrie

    • justanotherwakeupcall September 8, 2012 at 6:25 am:09 #

      I am glad you like it! Wanted to return back and do some more but just didn’t find the time :) You don’t need to thank me, the pleasure is all mine :)

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