The Veil

I am trying to catch up.

Day 1 of Writing 201: Poetry – Prompt : Screen ; Form: Haiku; Device : Alliteration

 
 

Vilely, I call her name

Her valiant eyes defy me

Through the vigilant veil
 

or
 
Vilely, I call her name

Her virtuous eyes deny me

Through the vigilant veil
 
 

I love the economy of Haiku and am amazed by the way changing a couple of words changes the essence of the verse.

 

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2 Comments Add yours

  1. Pretty abstract thoughts.

    1. pretty or abstract or both? 🙂 ha ha

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